The spring is very good seasons. In the spring,we can go to the forest.Feeling nature give we brought vary.Some fungus go for the mother earth.Give me you fist touch the river water,you can discoverable the water no longer cold.Breathe atmosphere,you can smell perfumed flower.In the spring resurrection,everywhere was humming with activity,thus was should go to hug spring.

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　　Spring is a wonderful season. In spring, we can go to the forest to enjoy the nature. We can see green trees, hear birds singing, smell the flowers and breathe the fresh air. In spring, everything comes back to life. The weather becomes warmer and warmer, we all like going outside to play and enjoy ourselves.

　　修改老师：Crystal 老师

　　高三:李玫